Cold Ashes

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4413883-cold-ashes

This story is interesting. The description is fantastic, and leaves me satisfied. The words describing the setting are so real that I feel myself right there, beside the characters. Also, the mood and tone are set perfectly, it gives me a slight chill on the back of my neck. For example, when Ryan is bit on the wrist, the kind of approach on how to describe is put me on the edge of my seat. The following actions made me excited, and desperate to read more. And as I continue on, I find more parts propelling me forward, desperate to find out what will happen next.

I saw almost no flaws in this story. Maybe a spelling error here or there, but nothing major. It’s very well written, and the grammar is almost spot on. But then again, the storyline seems to be also dragging. Yes, the detail is fantastic, and the setting is outstanding, but the pace of the story is kind of slow. A little too slow to be relaxing, but fast enough to where it’s boring.

Overall, I think this story is pretty amazing. I would recommend it more to boys than girls, because of the feel of the story. The grammar is outstanding, and the detail is fabulous. The story will keep you wanting more. I don’t think it will ever get boring, considering the storyline seems to be pretty solid. The pace, despite feeling slow, is needed to get the feel of the setting. Again, not relaxing, but that shouldn’t matter because this story is meant to send chills up your spine, not put you to sleep.

The Dreamer's Cycle: Born of Fire Volume One

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4448411-the-dreamer%27s-cycle-born-of-fire-volume-one

This makes me feel like I’m reading a never ending poem. Honestly, the descriptiveness is so magical feeling and it really gets you relaxed, but it starts out not feeling like a story but just a run-on of words.

In any case, I find this very well done. Very professional and I hope to see it win the Watty awards. Things of improvement is the chapters feel too long, too slow as well, they feel like they drag on forever when reading. It’s a great style, to have and I’m not dissing it, I’m just giving my personal opinion.

It’s an interesting plot and I recommend this to the reader who is looking for a dreamy fantasy with heavy imagery and descriptiveness. Very well written, very well done. Just not for me, but I wish the author luck in their writing career. 

The Mutant Star Tragedy

http://www.wattpad.com/story/4022542-the-mutant-star-tragedy

This story is brilliant. It should have more readers and votes than its got. This is for someone who wants a Sci-Fi Scare. This will make you cringe, the way it was worded I’m an impressed with the descriptiveness, it sometimes can get graphic and gross you out, but that’s why it’s great.

The summary may not be all that intriguing at first, but the story kept me hooked. I love seeing the author’s dedication and effort within this read and I look forward to reading more to this book. An end of the world book or movie has becoming something sometimes boring, cliché and done too much… But this story is one of the apocalyptic books I am loving.

Grammar and sometimes perspective could be better. But in any case, if you’re looking for an apocalyptic story, I highly recommend this for you. This story is R-rated for a reason though. If you’re squeamish to murder, rape, abduction, stomach churning violence… This story not for you, but I will swear this story makes all the horror feel real. And that means the author has made a successful story.

My King

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Where do I begin? I think this is interesting. I think this story could go far. The plot is not completely original, but the storyline itself is quite fabulous. I enjoyed reading about the main character’s conflict, and I enjoyed how realistic the reactions were to the plot twist and certain characters. The grammar is great as well. I saw no flaws in it, and I could tell that setting plays a giant roll in the character’s speech, which was portrayed greatly again.

If I had to give the author something to work on, I guess it would just be storyline. There’s a lot of room to really do anything with it. There’s also a chance that the story could fall off it’s high horse and into a big pile of shit. But, I just can’t really see that happening, even if there’s a possibility. So, in saying that, what I suggest is try to eliminate any possibility that this story could go wrong.

Overall, I like this story. I wouldn’t go as far to say I love it, considering there isn’t enough of the story to really draw me in. Of course, it got me interested, but it didn’t grab me, and hold me tight. I would mostly recommend it to girls, seeing as it gave me a fairy tale feel.